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There is a rumbling in my stomach, speaking a long-forgotten language. Forgotten not because of neglect, but a desire to eliminate the need for thirst, hunger, and subsistence of all kinds.

Starvation is a small, unloved monster, sitting alone in the rain with a box of moldy Danishes and a cup of contaminated water. It cries out in the night for a friend, but can never keep them for long. Either it is pushed out by contentment or kills the very friend it made, its heart ever more saddened.

Starvation is angry at its plight. It did not ask to be the cause of so much grief and turmoil. It simply wants a place to live, a permanent residence to call home. It was once told that no such place exists for a being whose existence is a vacuum, pulling in all things like a black hole. The more perishable it is, the further it flies to the center of the lonely beast.

Starvation once made a deal with contentment and asked if they could share a room together. It was agreed, but they soon found that neither could stay in the same room without pushing out the other. So they decided to trade, jumping back and forth in a never-ending cycle.

Starvation always sees sadness and contentment always sees joy. They found a need for each other when they shared stories laden with loss and discovery as well as happiness and insight. As they trade-out, a new story is shared amongst them, their friendship growing until an entire tome was constructed from lessons learned together.

They now accept their lives and have found peace in movement, harmony in the connection of pain and pleasure, a deep understanding of knowledge through union.

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I got this idea while sitting in a food-place looking at expensive food I could not afford.

-Vaperfox :diny:
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Perpetualwolfsage Apr 15, 2009  Student General Artist
I love that you seemed to give them personalities...It's just a simple idea that makes so much sense. I feel it when you write it. As funny as that sounds.

Next time I'm hungry...I'll think of you. :3

So...in a few hours.
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Thanks! I noticed halfway through the writing that starvation needed a personality and a friend to bounce things off of.

When you think of hunger, think of Vaperfox!

-Vaperfox :diny:


"When you think of garage, think of Akeem!"
---Eddie Murphy as Akeem about to throw garbage away, from Coming to America
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Unless it comes with a bottlecap, I don't need it.

Mmm, bottlecaped donuts...

-Vaperfox :diny:
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hexocain Apr 11, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really good. The humanization of the concept of starvation is very engaging, and you make a flood of good, thought-provoking points and images. You even made a little mythical story out of the relationship between starvation and contentment. I love it.

I was going to say it's a bit rough and that you should work on refining the form, but now that I think about it, I think it's just because of the way I write. This text looks like the rough draft to one of mine, and that gives me an urge to 'finish' it, but it is finished. It just isn't my style. Funny how being a writer can impair one's ability to read like that.

Speaking of starvation, have you read Kafka's The Hunger Artist and Knut Hamsun's Hunger? They're in no way relevant to this text, I'm just digressing because I love those two, and because I want to write something about it myself. :)
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Thank you so much! :hug:

The idea of humanizing starvation occurred to me during the writing when I visualized it as a small monster. Once that happened, I imagined the kind of life this creature would lead and how it would affect the world around it. It also helped that I wrote this thanks to my hunger when I sat in a place with food I couldn't afford.

Contentment seemed like the most logical friend for starvation, since they could just trade off between states of being. I thought about the folklore of various cultures and how they personify emotions and ideas into physical form. Once I hit that, I ran with it.

I am aware of the rough nature of my surrealist writings. It is true that deviantART occasionally sees the second-draft of such writings, but they rarely change more than in a few word choices.

Part of the surrealist writing is to leave it as it appears in its raw, natural form so the train-of-thought can be observed as it makes its way around the mind. I understand how it feels to look at another work and compare it to your own writing. Personal experience does color what you read, but if you notice something that could use some sprucing up, I'd be happy to hear about it.

I haven't read The Hunger Artist or Hunger, but I have heard of the former. I read the synopsis on Wikipedia [link] . It seems like an amazing story! I also read the synopsis of Hunger [link]) . Both of these works seem like excellent pieces of literature. Since I have a preference for short stories and novellas, I may end up reading The Hunger Artist eventually, but I will keep in mind Hamsun's work as well.

Are there any other noteworthy readings, fiction or non, that you would like to share with me? I'd be happy to hear about them.

-Vaperfox :diny:
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hexocain Apr 12, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't see this as surrealism at all. It doesn't look like stream-of-consciousness, it's more like a (very finished) philosophical/poetic text. The ideas shine through so clearly.

Noteworthy readings, well, there's tons. :D It all depends on what your area of interest is. I can't count the number of books I've read just in the past six months' time that have blown me away.

Oliver Sacks' writings especially have stuck, though. I forget if I've told you about him before, but he's a neurologist, and he specializes in looking at how people's perception and personality changes after they get brain damaged either from trauma or disease. Any one of his books is a great read. In the short story department I recommend Solvej Balle's According to the Law [link] - but I doubt you can find it in American libraries. :/

Have you seen that The Hunger Artist is available online? [link]
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You're right in noticing this doesn't really feel like surrealism. What I do is write down the title of my writing as surrealist and then try it out. Usually the mindset is enough to make things click, but sometimes decidedly nonsurrealistic things appear out of it. Still, there's always that essence bubbling under the surface, so I keep the title because it was my original inspiration.

I like books that talk about perception and how different people see the world. I especially enjoy books where people who believe they have the "true" way of seeing are woken up to the reality of multiple perspectives as they learn to accept the world in all its variety.

I didn't know The Hunger Artist was online. I'll give a look. Thanks!

-Vaperfox :diny:
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